Welcome in from your lurking, Lehsreh!
I don't know if other members have seen your work before; it's new to me. I did kind of feel like I was jumping into the middle of the story, but at the same time it is clear you have talent.
Things I liked:
- Good dialogue amongst the Joes. Again, jumping in the middle of the story I'm not sure why they're so hostile, but it was emotional and powerful nonetheless.
- The sets were simple and effective. I especially liked the "holodeck" hallway.
- Good photography and shot orientation. With the exception of some blurry shots, the overall quality was very good.
- I liked the comedy bit where Destro gives Baroness a kiss and all his minions turn away.
Critiques:
- Why did the word bubble format change? I like the translucent bubbles in the Joe conversations, however I found the hollow arrows in those same bubbles distracting.
- Cobra Commander seemed off...I think it was a combination of his dialogue being too straightforward and that swooping mask that makes it look like he's always spinning his head around.
- GI Smurfs? Not sure I get what that means.
Thanks for sharing, when I get a chance I'll go back and check out the beginning of the story.
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